eunice

...and here's MY final...

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Ernest Burden

There's very little to say about this work, its so well constructed. There are a few issues, however.

What's behind the interior glass and the railing isn't balanced with the contrast of the rest. The undersides of the floors could be darker, which would help the feeling of light in the whole space. The ground floor material would be nice darke to weight the image. The HVAC duct is in a position that interferes with the image, it would be better lft out.

Otherwise, really nice work. The window wall feels just right, the sky color is right (maybe a LITTLE darker). I especially love the plants--perfect light, transparency. Their shadow isn't right, however, too fuzzy. As far as an image goes, I don't think the opening to a lower floor helps you at all. It doesn't hurt, I suppose. But without it you pay more attention to the main space. We cannot usually control what we are asked to draw, so having something like that is to be expected, even if it doesn't help the picture.

What we see outside is neither burned nor dark and contrasty enough to confuse what's in and what's out. Good work.

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Ernest Burden III
AcmeDigital
architectural rendering

matthewbannister

Camera and framing is very strong. A crisp, sharp rendering. Nice textures especially on the floor - mapping should follow on handrail though.

hbetter

The scale of your wood textures on the ceiling and on the floor is very convincing. Your attentions to details have captured the authencity of the space similar to the way a camera catches an architectural moment. The lighting is dramatic and the nautical wall system is perfect for this Miami-like space.

ehanson

I agree, a very satisfying rendering. Good transition of foreground to rearground, a convincing but not cliche use of global illumination, and nice entrance of daylight. Very nice.

jkletzien

I really do like the technical mastery in this piece and I definitely like looking at it.

I have two comments on this. First I feel like this has not been thought about not as a canvas but a 3D model. Not the biggest sin in the world, but this could use some more time in photoshop where we could add just a few things to put it over the top and make it a painting – someone wearing a brown jacket walking into the scene from the bottom right of the canvas. –pulling the brown you have on the left hand side down and across the bottom.

Removing the people we see on the floor below at the bottom left, and darkening this area as well. No way could it compete with the light in the main space anyway and you definitely don’t want to provide a point of interest that close to the edge of the format.