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Old September 8th, 2008   #1 (permalink)
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Hi guys..Ive done this during my free time..Comments and suggestion are always and most welcome..Thank you..
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The mixed case of the font is very distracting...
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h£lL0 1 h@V3 a F3w c0MM3ntZ 4 U - 10l

I think you need to work more on your lighting and materials, its overexposed at the moment and needs more subtle detailed lighting throughout.

How about stronger ambient, some uplighting on that tree, subtle underwater lights and more logical lighting on the interior - it looks like there is a super strong light on the ground behind the bath that doesnt look good.

Some specularity on all of the materials would be good, as well as a higher res texture / bump / spec map on that wall

Composistion wise its pretty weird as well, painting is distracting - maybe move it inside? Books under the bath? Sticks in the water? Try some different camera posistions.

Anyway hope this is of some help!
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As a photographer, I am struck by the art in this render.

An outdoor bath by a reflecting pool... Reminds me of some architecture from Japan that I studied last year. The only thing on that guy's 3rd level house was an outdoor tub with a meditation garden.

True, Nic's observation about a lack of lighting on the tree is spot-on, however I think ANY lighting in the foreground would ruin the ART of the composition.

Air. Space. Light. Shadow.

But that's just my 2 cents.
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Nice, I find the picture very relaxing. Great work.
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nice light and mood nice idea
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I like it. You can keep the purple one though.....
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I think you need to work more on your lighting and materials, its overexposed at the moment and needs more subtle detailed lighting throughout.

How about stronger ambient, some uplighting on that tree, subtle underwater lights and more logical lighting on the interior - it looks like there is a super strong light on the ground behind the bath that doesnt look good.

Some specularity on all of the materials would be good, as well as a higher res texture / bump / spec map on that wall

Composistion wise its pretty weird as well, painting is distracting - maybe move it inside? Books under the bath? Sticks in the water? Try some different camera posistions.

Anyway hope this is of some help!

Thanks Nic for those helpful suggestions..I will consider those comments of yours in my next projects.Thanks a lot mate.Cheers!
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As a photographer, I am struck by the art in this render.

An outdoor bath by a reflecting pool... Reminds me of some architecture from Japan that I studied last year. The only thing on that guy's 3rd level house was an outdoor tub with a meditation garden.

True, Nic's observation about a lack of lighting on the tree is spot-on, however I think ANY lighting in the foreground would ruin the ART of the composition.

Air. Space. Light. Shadow.

But that's just my 2 cents.
Thanks Joel..I agree also with lack of lighting.Thanks guys for all your heads up...Really help me a lot..
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