Eyal Shmuel - Final

zion3d · March 22nd, 2005

Good Luck everybody!!!

Ernest Burden · March 27th, 2005

Nothing like a good train station. The lighting suggests a dusty atmosphere (low contrast) but shows too little 'volumetric light'.

There are a few problem with the far end of the station. The end glass wall has a wide spacing of mullions, while the roof is very heavily spaced. I would like to see more detailing to that glass wall. Most imprtantly--the whole picture leads off to the right, down the tracks and out the tunnel and off to..wherever the trains go. But the station must end. The stairs do an effective job of stopping the eye and giving an 'around and over' oppotunity. Except on the right where the steps are occluded too much by stuff. Show the stairs and maybe even get some light on them.

How do you get to the middle platform? OK, maybe you don't, but it looks like it has seating (missing from the other platforms) which confuses the use.

hbetter · March 28th, 2005

Not that convincing of a space. The space reads very flat. Could be a result of the chosen perspective. Feels distorted.

Lon · March 29th, 2005

Reminds me of a Michael Graves design. The lighting is effective, but somehow the composition feels unbalanced. The scale of some of the smaller elements are a little too large.

honzal · March 29th, 2005

good work in terms of craft but need "an artistic" lead.
Composition doesn't really work, glass blocks are too large.

Needs to be tuned more.

Jan

matthewbannister · March 31st, 2005

A strong composition. The subject matter of the train station is a very good one to study. It has a good nostalgic vibe. More could've been made of the clock. There's something about the sunlight doesn't feel like quarter to one.

March 27th, 2005	#2 (permalink)
Ernest Burden Veteran Member Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Ossining, NY USA Posts: 4,999 Name: Ernest Burden III	Re: Eyal Shmuel - Final Nothing like a good train station. The lighting suggests a dusty atmosphere (low contrast) but shows too little 'volumetric light'. There are a few problem with the far end of the station. The end glass wall has a wide spacing of mullions, while the roof is very heavily spaced. I would like to see more detailing to that glass wall. Most imprtantly--the whole picture leads off to the right, down the tracks and out the tunnel and off to..wherever the trains go. But the station must end. The stairs do an effective job of stopping the eye and giving an 'around and over' oppotunity. Except on the right where the steps are occluded too much by stuff. Show the stairs and maybe even get some light on them. How do you get to the middle platform? OK, maybe you don't, but it looks like it has seating (missing from the other platforms) which confuses the use. __________________ Ernest Burden III AcmeDigital architectural rendering

March 28th, 2005	#3 (permalink)
hbetter Member Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Boston Posts: 68 Name: Hansy Better	Re: Eyal Shmuel - Final Not that convincing of a space. The space reads very flat. Could be a result of the chosen perspective. Feels distorted.

March 29th, 2005	#4 (permalink)
Lon Member Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Cambridge, MA Posts: 64 Name: Lon Grohs	Re: Eyal Shmuel - Final Reminds me of a Michael Graves design. The lighting is effective, but somehow the composition feels unbalanced. The scale of some of the smaller elements are a little too large.

March 29th, 2005	#5 (permalink)
honzal Member Join Date: May 2002 Location: Czech Republic Posts: 49 Name: Jan Rybar	Re: Eyal Shmuel - Final good work in terms of craft but need "an artistic" lead. Composition doesn't really work, glass blocks are too large. Needs to be tuned more. Jan

March 31st, 2005	#6 (permalink)
matthewbannister Member Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: new york Age: 41 Posts: 68 Name: dbox matthew bannister	Re: Eyal Shmuel - Final A strong composition. The subject matter of the train station is a very good one to study. It has a good nostalgic vibe. More could've been made of the clock. There's something about the sunlight doesn't feel like quarter to one.

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