Alicja Bula - final

Alicja · March 22nd, 2005

..with the short story

Ernest Burden · March 27th, 2005

The message I read from this is the story of a disabled person who feels excluded from a grand outside. Perhaps the person is a veteran of a war ("I Want You" poster). The house is a collection of found or re-used stuff (the grafitti not liely by the occupant). It all works to the extent that I am able to read all that into it.

But the message is muddled. The outside is so bright and un-realistic that the 'bleak' interior is the only part with validity. Maybe that's the point? I don't think it allows a proper visual comparison.

The light could shine on the person, but doesn't. Another seperation. I would have liked to see that 'confrontation' of the brightness of the utopian part hitting the person. Either that, or have them dark but overlapping the window opening.

I guess I'm getting away from the rendering task of the competition, but I think that is the artist's intent.

Overall, the picture needs to be pulled towards being more simple and straightforward with lighting, textures and composition to better communicate its message.

hbetter · March 28th, 2005

What I like about this image is that I can tell if it is a painting or a rendering. Very powerful methods Alicja is deploying.

Lon · March 29th, 2005

Very evocative image. It’s an interesting collage. The floor slabs look a little like Lego blocks and I’m not sure if this section perspective is the right choice for such an introspective image. Although, that could be the point. We’re looking at this from society’s point of view?

honzal · March 29th, 2005

It looks like very good picture but I just can't get the combination of outside and inside. Foreground and background are not in an oposition in that right way. The image could work more as an illustration for a story then an image which should tells the story itself.

Otherwise the "old house" is very well done.

Jan

matthewbannister · March 31st, 2005

Beautifully executed set design. The attention to idiosyncratic detail is inspired. I'd like to know more about the scene in the background as it seems intentionally disconnected, which is possibly a mood that was carefully thought through.

March 27th, 2005	#2 (permalink)
Ernest Burden Veteran Member Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Ossining, NY USA Posts: 4,999 Name: Ernest Burden III	Re: Alicja Bula - final The message I read from this is the story of a disabled person who feels excluded from a grand outside. Perhaps the person is a veteran of a war ("I Want You" poster). The house is a collection of found or re-used stuff (the grafitti not liely by the occupant). It all works to the extent that I am able to read all that into it. But the message is muddled. The outside is so bright and un-realistic that the 'bleak' interior is the only part with validity. Maybe that's the point? I don't think it allows a proper visual comparison. The light could shine on the person, but doesn't. Another seperation. I would have liked to see that 'confrontation' of the brightness of the utopian part hitting the person. Either that, or have them dark but overlapping the window opening. I guess I'm getting away from the rendering task of the competition, but I think that is the artist's intent. Overall, the picture needs to be pulled towards being more simple and straightforward with lighting, textures and composition to better communicate its message. __________________ Ernest Burden III AcmeDigital architectural rendering

March 28th, 2005	#3 (permalink)
hbetter Member Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Boston Posts: 68 Name: Hansy Better	Re: Alicja Bula - final What I like about this image is that I can tell if it is a painting or a rendering. Very powerful methods Alicja is deploying.

March 29th, 2005	#4 (permalink)
Lon Member Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Cambridge, MA Posts: 64 Name: Lon Grohs	Re: Alicja Bula - final Very evocative image. It’s an interesting collage. The floor slabs look a little like Lego blocks and I’m not sure if this section perspective is the right choice for such an introspective image. Although, that could be the point. We’re looking at this from society’s point of view?

March 29th, 2005	#5 (permalink)
honzal Member Join Date: May 2002 Location: Czech Republic Posts: 49 Name: Jan Rybar	Re: Alicja Bula - final It looks like very good picture but I just can't get the combination of outside and inside. Foreground and background are not in an oposition in that right way. The image could work more as an illustration for a story then an image which should tells the story itself. Otherwise the "old house" is very well done. Jan Last edited by honzal; March 29th, 2005 at 03:41 PM.

March 31st, 2005	#6 (permalink)
matthewbannister Member Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: new york Age: 41 Posts: 68 Name: dbox matthew bannister	Re: Alicja Bula - final Beautifully executed set design. The attention to idiosyncratic detail is inspired. I'd like to know more about the scene in the background as it seems intentionally disconnected, which is possibly a mood that was carefully thought through.

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