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hbetter

This is a very beautiful image!!!! It’s a shame that the placement of one of the overhead lights disrupts the continuity and composition of the stadium roof. Great atmospheric mood!

ehanson

Poor lighting, very little sense of direction or key/fill ratio. No sense of z-depth atmosphere. Odd that no one is inside but congregated outside. Inverted shadow black point- shadows are darker further back!

matthewbannister

If the foreground roadway was gone and the background city had some atmosphere to make it appear distant this image would work as a stylized illustration of future urban decay. Right now however, it looks like a view of a stadium in a part of the city you would never want to visit.

Arnold Gallardo

Upon initial observation, the composition and overal feeling of this piece, one feel that it is cluttered with elements that are not necessary. It is hard to know what is being emphasized here? All or the elements in the image or none? What I mean is are the stadium's location the subject matter? The roadway that is around it, the buildings in the background or everything?

It was also hard to determine the dominant light on this scene and what time of day it is. The lighting here is all over and does not 'lead' the eye into the image, it forces the viewer to look at everything and everywhere. There is no sense of drama or presence working here.

Compositionally it is better to have just blurred some elements of the scene like the background and the foreground to emphasize parts of it or the subject matter itself which seems to be the stadium.

Illustratively as a graphic arts this works more since it can be used as poster for an event with the background elements bluured and overlayed with text on the right side. As an arch-vis pirce however this does not work cohesively specially with the 'matted outline' feeling with the heavily blurred green background.

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Arnold Gallardo
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Lon

This image has a lot of good components but it reads more as an assemblage of pieces than it does a cohesive illustration.

The mood is good and dramatic, but it needs depth, careful attention to lighting, and a story behind it. For instance all of the people outside the stadium and the cars racing around makes me think that the people are evacuating from the imminent storm on the horizon.

(This is minor but worth noting - while you can buy cars in almost any color - they are typically much more subtle and desaturated. The blurred streaks of pure color take away from the image.)

Ernest Burden

Your strong use of color help this rendering overcome some weak points.

I like the stadium design, and your view shows it at its best by allowing the sweeping lines to, well, sweep. The hint of the field through the gap under the roofline lets you know what this place is, without actually showing it.

The curved road is a nice framing element, but doesn't do enough to be dramatic. Darker, in a big shadow, perhaps? Maybe showing under it a little on the right, to say its elevated like the other one. I just think it confines your main subject too much without adding enough.

The background is like a stand of spectator, looking in on the event. They seem oddly formal compared to the stadium, even as they are placed rather randomly (no street grid). So either make them drop back more or be more engaged with the foreground, either by color links, or, what I would want to see, a series of bridges that connects the city to the sport stadium.

The entry, grass and people coming in are great. They are too evenly spaced. People, like dirt, clump up.

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Ernest Burden III
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