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Ernest Burden

I am confused about how the lighting goes from so cool to so warm from the same sunlight, but the use of color temperature is very well done. I see that we have some indoor lighting coming from under the balcony, but it would not be as strong as the light coming in the windows, would it? I guess I'm saying that the light in the main part of the rendering should not be as blue as it is, it takes over.

I think you have too much ceiling, not enough of the lower parts. If the frame cut off a little lower than you have it, it would make more of a point of the balcony, show more of the warm light below. Doing so would help show thow the 'floating' nature of the balcony. Currently, everything in the image slides from left to right. The strong mullioning of the window wall on the right help balance this direction, but not enough.

Your figures are great, perfectly balanced in color to wherever they are in the rendering. However, I wish there was a person or two in the lower right chairs to make that lower level more inviting.

The ceiling and wall textures are fantastic, of course. It's the first thing you see. And the second. And the fourth. Meaning it;s hard to see anything else. You could make the same point with less-strong surface detail. And what about the floors? Where is their surface detail?

The wings are a nice touch, though I have trouble figuring out where they are. Are they on the upper walkway? Is there room to walk by them?

Finally, while I like your lighting from the outside, I would prefer you made either the skylights OR the windowwall the stronger. As it is, they contribute about the same brightness, which takes away impact. Of the two, it would be better to have the skylight stronger since you see it adding light in the distant room.

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Ernest Burden III
AcmeDigital
architectural rendering

matthewbannister

A wonderful, creatively original approach to the brief - emotionally strong, inviting a good display of technical proficiency. The overall interrogation works well and there is a good balance of warm and cool however, the table, chairs and person to the lower right are less than convincing. The image would have worked equally well without the furniture.

hbetter

Textures are great but why juxtapose such a generic hotel lobby architecture next to such a fantastical space? The blue lighting and varying textures evokes an underwater world and it is ashamed that an unimaginative grid window wall has violated it.

ehanson

Great use of specularity and value to convey a compelling space. The eye veers too far off to discern the warm values, however, it could be useful to integrate it more centrally..

jkletzien

I really like the ambitiousness of the space you are attempting here, and that you have taken that complexity and broken it down graphically through value and chroma. I also like the choice of camera position as placing it along a tangent point to the railing really provides you that dramatic curve as well as a strong compositional element.

That said I don’t really like the target point or at least the cropping on the left, you seem to really want to catch the left hand wall – my guess is to preserve the relationship of the swan to the middle of the space but my feeling is that opening this up really pulls the eye outside. When the real story for my money and I think yours too, (you’ve exposed for interior light levels – and the outside is burned out) is the light cascading in and down into the space – not the view out.

The bump mapping is heavy, clearly necessarily for the materials you were intending but on the left hand side and in the arris in the ceiling the basic geometry shines through and it needs to have a little photoshop to break those readings down.

Of course you can also make much of that problem go away by cropping in on the left, on the top, darkening the bird figure and making the image about what I think you want…the light pouring in down through the atrium.