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Ernest Burden

Here we have another work inspired by Escher, this time the house with stairs going in all directions. And yet the place is mostly plausible. It would be completely if not for the trees growning sideways on the walls. It's a lot of fun. You can hear the water flowing, bouncing off the wall shapes in odd ways. The textures on those walls recall Frank Lloyd Wright's cast concrete organic shapes.

While I suppose you are using the very green glass to bring green into the space, I find it takes away from the glass reading well. It;s fine in the less dark areas of glass, but quickly becomes overpowering. The blue is just right. Can't the trees carry some green instead of the glass?

I find that the building seen outside confuses the image a bit, better with lower contrast.

Framing is an issue, you have a lot going right with the walkways, shadows, openings to below, but then the rigt side has nothing. Besides a few weak shadows, you have nothing to frame the right. A person walking in would take care of it, organically.

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Ernest Burden III
AcmeDigital
architectural rendering

matthewbannister

Not sure. The office of MC Echer? An original approach however the overall execution has become overly complex. The complex nature of the image could be developed to provide greater clarity. Perhaps an alternative camera position with less dead space to the right and emphasis of the primary elements within the scene.

hbetter

You have obliterated this space through the use of light and texture. The shadows overpower any other textures of the space and would of benefited from slightly more transparency. It would be great if the image could oscillate between cohesion and disorientation. At the moment it is overly disorienting.

ehanson

It is very disorienting, I hope intentionally. Also, the warm lower area advances rather than receeds as it should. I personally would strip out the trees and foliage and re-work the image as a value study..

jkletzien

I really am fascinated by this image/design – though in looking at it several times over the last couple of weeks I really am frustrated about the point of view. What I see here is the architecture really challenging the idea of the ground plane and four walls – and most poetically tying together the blue water and sky through the fissures in the walls, floor, and ceiling – which I really love.

But then the rest of the skylight – the natural counterpart to the “L” form of the waterfall and stream is cropped in favor of seeing a bunch of perspectivally distorted chairs below. This is further emphasized by the use of a vibrant orange here that doesn’t seem to exist anywhere else in the scene.

My recommendation is go back, look at the architecture, what is the story you want to tell and make your decisions using that narrative.