Wong Kum Fei - Final

metaball · March 21st, 2005

I'm not sure if this simple composition is able to engage the viewer in anyway after seeing all the brilliant works of the other competitors. Good luck to myself and the rest.

Ernest Burden · March 27th, 2005

So close! Overall, you have a wonderful color balance. It all works together in color, saturation and brightness.

The composition is the problem. You did a great job, but it could be better. If the point is the 'square' then why tip the camera away from a pure frontal view of the window? If you see it straight=on it is square(ish), now it is a trapaziod. OK, we all know its square in shape, but graphically it isn't. Then, notice how we have a square in the curved wall, squares in the far wall and an opening to the background that is...what? Waht is it? If the camera is a little left you can catch the far edge of the opening and get that shape defined.

Then there are the non-square elements that keep the piece dynamic.

If the far wall is seen in shade perhaps it should be a bit darker.

hbetter · March 28th, 2005

Competent image.

Lon · March 29th, 2005

All the pieces are there, the lighting and textures are well done, but the composition needs some more thought. I’d like to see more detail in the world out the window.

honzal · March 29th, 2005

I can say just the same - all is there but composition is not good at all. And again I can't feel the scale.

Jan

matthewbannister · March 31st, 2005

The picture frame is a good idea. It seems weirdly cropped at the top. I like the fact that it starts to have a certain signature, suggest looking at the work of Di Chirico.

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Ernest Burden Veteran Member Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Ossining, NY USA Posts: 4,999 Name: Ernest Burden III	Re: Wong Kum Fei - Final So close! Overall, you have a wonderful color balance. It all works together in color, saturation and brightness. The composition is the problem. You did a great job, but it could be better. If the point is the 'square' then why tip the camera away from a pure frontal view of the window? If you see it straight=on it is square(ish), now it is a trapaziod. OK, we all know its square in shape, but graphically it isn't. Then, notice how we have a square in the curved wall, squares in the far wall and an opening to the background that is...what? Waht is it? If the camera is a little left you can catch the far edge of the opening and get that shape defined. Then there are the non-square elements that keep the piece dynamic. If the far wall is seen in shade perhaps it should be a bit darker. __________________ Ernest Burden III AcmeDigital architectural rendering

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hbetter Member Join Date: Feb 2005 Location: Boston Posts: 68 Name: Hansy Better	Re: Wong Kum Fei - Final Competent image.

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Lon Member Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Cambridge, MA Posts: 64 Name: Lon Grohs	Re: Wong Kum Fei - Final All the pieces are there, the lighting and textures are well done, but the composition needs some more thought. I’d like to see more detail in the world out the window.

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honzal Member Join Date: May 2002 Location: Czech Republic Posts: 49 Name: Jan Rybar	Re: Wong Kum Fei - Final I can say just the same - all is there but composition is not good at all. And again I can't feel the scale. Jan

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matthewbannister Member Join Date: Mar 2005 Location: new york Age: 41 Posts: 68 Name: dbox matthew bannister	Re: Wong Kum Fei - Final The picture frame is a good idea. It seems weirdly cropped at the top. I like the fact that it starts to have a certain signature, suggest looking at the work of Di Chirico.

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